【1級エッセイ練習】Robots 

今週も、日本人先生にSkypeでエッセイ添削をしてもらいました。今回は英作文問題から、今興味のあるRobotの話題。

日本人の先生方がよく使われるフレーズに「意味は通るけど、何だか気持ち悪い」とか「耳にしっくりこないんだよなぁ」というつぶやき・・・すごいな、といつも思ってしまいます。

それだけコーパスが脳内で出来上がっていて、留学経験なしで、そこに行きつくインプット量で相当ですよね><



Agree or Disagree: Future generations will become more dependent on robots.


POINTS Efficiency / Costs / Artificial intelligence / Labor shortage / Employment / Aging society

The advertadvent of robots has given influence on our society dramatically. I believe that our dependence on robots will be increasing more in the future. Here are three reasons why I insist so.

         First, some countries have faced been facing problems 具体的に!例は一つ挙げよう!caused by aging society. (As more aged people retired in today’s society, )with more people retiring and the birth rate decreasing,Actually governments would struggle to ensure enough workforce to sustain their economy. against lack of younger workforce too. However, with robots, this issue would be resolved easily because robots are strong and tough enough to tackle on heavy workload instead of humans. Additionally they can work for 24/ 7 as long as their battery lasts.

         Second, robots are cost-effective also effective for cost-saving. As an actual example, some hotel in Japan set humanoid robots as counter clerks, which led to not only reduction of labor costs but also increase of amusement for kids.名詞 動詞になっているのでwhich not only led to  redcution of cost but also made the hotel more attractive to children. Of course, they don’t have to pay extra allowance for night shifts to the robots. The hotel owner has already decided to expand this robot project to branch hotels in overseas.  ここまでグダグダやらない。会話調になってしまう。しまらない。This could be a good evidence evidenceは冠詞はつかないし、複数にもならない! that robot can bring us more benefits, both economically and mentally.

         Lastly, artificial intelligence is being developed rapidly nowadays. Consequently we can promote our trust on robots more.一概には言えないけど・・・ま、いい。Especially under the situation of disasters like radiation contamination, we can depend on robots’ intelligence absolutely.会話調。 For instance, they can search their way even in a dangerous and black-out space with their embedded program and a remote control by human. The datedata the robots (collected with the A.I ) must be (useful) the strongest deterrence for next disaster. 明らかにおかしい!deterrence to  criminals やto nuclear proliferationなら良いけど・・・。  

the data the robots collected are indispensable for preventing future disasters

       For these reasons, I believe that the existence of くどいrobots will be indispensable factor of for future society. Or I should say that they have already been integrated incorporated into our lives without our consciousness today. Anyway, In fact, it is true that robots are not our enemies. They could be our best friends.  


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